You have some good ideas here, but they are not completely coming through to the reader.
--> They are REALLY poorly written.
They are looking better, but I still had some questions and suggestions.
--> they are still bad.
These look good. I think you are ready to submit them after you make some small changes to the wording.
--> I'm tired of this. YOU CAN NOT EVEN SPELL!!
[翻譯] 火山之下 by 安東尼波登